You are the center of my universe.
I, and a myriad of other lesser objects, orbit you
held by your STRONG gravitational ATTRACTION.
We cannot escape it.
I, and a myriad of other lesser objects, orbit you
held by your STRONG gravitational ATTRACTION.
We cannot escape it.
You have the ultimate POWER.
You fuse that which is simple into more complex substance,
radiating ENERGY and light
which races through space,
brightening all that is around you.
You are LUMINESCENT.
Without you I would have no day, only darkness
I would feel no WARMTH.
You sustain my life .
You fuse that which is simple into more complex substance,
radiating ENERGY and light
which races through space,
brightening all that is around you.
You are LUMINESCENT.
Without you I would have no day, only darkness
I would feel no WARMTH.
You sustain my life .
I am told there are other stars
with other solar systems and planets,
but they are dim copies of you to me,
barely a twinkle of light compared to your brilliance.
I will always remain here
depending on you and observing
as you go through your life cycle:
burning ever brighter,
becoming a red giant.
Eventually as you exhaust your fuel and dim
and turn white,
I will remain
as we both grow older and colder,
and fade into the blackness together
with other solar systems and planets,
but they are dim copies of you to me,
barely a twinkle of light compared to your brilliance.
I will always remain here
depending on you and observing
as you go through your life cycle:
burning ever brighter,
becoming a red giant.
Eventually as you exhaust your fuel and dim
and turn white,
I will remain
as we both grow older and colder,
and fade into the blackness together
I'm not sure if you ment this
The words in capitals are a
"You sustain my life" this should be "You sustain me (and/or) all that I am"
just think it sounds better.
This is a really good idea for a poem and you did it very well. Other than the above, I don't think there is anything at all that it needs. It's fairly perfect as is.